ext_148479 ([identity profile] eibborn.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] amredthelector 2008-11-06 12:04 am (UTC)

It's good! Satisfying to read.

There is a typo right after the first break ("“All I’m say, sir, is that you’ll have to jump one of these days.”") and another later on ("Samuel had non encountered such a person since he had started his project.") but that's all the help I can offer to you, I'm afraid.

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